This coming Thursday, 5/18/23, Paul and I will be recording a BATPOLES episode about this unused treatment. As usual, any comments you leave will be considered for inclusion in the podcast.
Read the Treatment Here
TREATMENT by Yale Udoff: "Rembrandt the Third Meets His Master"
Moderators: Scott Sebring, Ben Bentley
TREATMENT by Yale Udoff: "Rembrandt the Third Meets His Master"
"I'm half-demented with whimsical outrage!"
-- The Joker, in a line cut from "The Joker's Epitaph"
-- The Joker, in a line cut from "The Joker's Epitaph"
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Re: TREATMENT by Yale Udoff: "Rembrandt the Third Meets His Master"
I may have more to say on this later.
first, thanks for sharing another treatment. I was excited to take a look though the title isn't that catchy. To be fair maybe it was just a placeholder title.
Hmm...what's good here? The concept. A villain who uses painting as a motif opens up some possibilities for storytelling, between a variety of schemes, criminal gang names and even hideout potential. But this just seems a bit dull.
Things that stood out.
Alfred faking a heart attack?!? On a show for children (and adults of course). There's no way they'd do that. Frightening for children and disturbing for adults. I'm sure after a hard day's work someone wants to see a unflappable Britigsh gentelman feign cardiac arrest. Not good.
Rembardnt the Third? I don't like the name for the villain.
Catching the duo in a net off a statue; expensive and not really related to painting. And just boring. Same with the deathtrap, seems expensive and not very interesting, a bit cliche.
The entire Moldavian (?) plot at the end. I think it was Moldavia, I'll go check another time but whatever that plot is, it read as boring. This is a treatment and yet this part draggged and I found myself skimming ahead.
The driving ending, not only would that be expensive it's not that interesting. Anticlimatic.
Preliminary thoughts. Regardless fellas, THANKS for sharing this.
first, thanks for sharing another treatment. I was excited to take a look though the title isn't that catchy. To be fair maybe it was just a placeholder title.
Hmm...what's good here? The concept. A villain who uses painting as a motif opens up some possibilities for storytelling, between a variety of schemes, criminal gang names and even hideout potential. But this just seems a bit dull.
Things that stood out.
Alfred faking a heart attack?!? On a show for children (and adults of course). There's no way they'd do that. Frightening for children and disturbing for adults. I'm sure after a hard day's work someone wants to see a unflappable Britigsh gentelman feign cardiac arrest. Not good.
Rembardnt the Third? I don't like the name for the villain.
Catching the duo in a net off a statue; expensive and not really related to painting. And just boring. Same with the deathtrap, seems expensive and not very interesting, a bit cliche.
The entire Moldavian (?) plot at the end. I think it was Moldavia, I'll go check another time but whatever that plot is, it read as boring. This is a treatment and yet this part draggged and I found myself skimming ahead.
The driving ending, not only would that be expensive it's not that interesting. Anticlimatic.
Preliminary thoughts. Regardless fellas, THANKS for sharing this.
Re: TREATMENT by Yale Udoff: "Rembrandt the Third Meets His Master"
I was mistaken on the deadline. We're recording on the 19th. So you have an additional day.
"I'm half-demented with whimsical outrage!"
-- The Joker, in a line cut from "The Joker's Epitaph"
-- The Joker, in a line cut from "The Joker's Epitaph"